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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.  To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With several
languages
 go to extinct every year, some claimed that
this
 should not be a concern as
people
’s life will be less complicated with fewer
languages
 used around the
world
. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
 opinion.
First
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 all,
languages
 that died out only were used and learned by a small number of
people
.
Therefore
, it is unlikely to make life easier
to
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 the majority of
people
, as most
people
 are still struggling to learn and
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master another
language
that is
 widely used across the
world
.
In addition
, it will cause much trouble and inconvenience for a certain group
people
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of people
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 that their
language
 was died out, as they have to learn a completely new
language
 from the scratch and try to
adapt
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new situation as soon as possible.
On the other hand
, the preservation of a variety of
languages
 is an essential mission to
the
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human beings.
This
 is because that a loss of one
language
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 not mean
it
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 literal sense and it
also
 presents a loss of the culture and
traditional
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 that possessed by a certain
language
. If
people
 from multiple backgrounds and cultures can
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 and respect others traditions and habits, there are will be fewer conflicts and more harmony among residents on
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this
 planet. What is more, once fewer
languages
 are used in the
world
, the creativity and innovation of technology and literature will definitely be on the decline as different
languages
 are a drive and essential for a prosperous
world
 in every
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. In conclusion, I think that
people
 should pay attention to the loss of
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language
 since it will be detrimental to the whole society.
Moreover
, fewer
language
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 will not lead to
a
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 easier life for most
people
 since it only benefits a minority of
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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