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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that there is a negative effect among the reading and writing
skills
 of the young
people
 while the
communication
 of them through computers and mobile phones is increasing. I agree
with
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that the existence of computers and mobile phones for
communication
 is important.
However
, I
also
 believe that there are problems
of
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 the reading and writing
skills
 among young
people
. It is beneficial for
people
 to communicate with each other by computers and mobile phones.
People
 can have
conversation
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conversations
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 instantly and convey ideas effectively. There
are
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 a wide range of advantages of immediate communications
such
 as exchange messages quickly. In
this
 way
case
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 the efficiency of work and study among
people
 will increase obviously.
Besides
, individuals have the
chances
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 to convey ideas without personal emotions like anger, anxiety and so on since
communication
 through tools offers a time for us to text to others with thinking. In
this
 way, tackling problems timely is feasible.
However
, it is
also
 necessary for
people
 to realize their problems
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 writing and reading
skills
. Young
people
 are gradually losing their literal ability which
are
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 significant for handling formal correspondence, as well
as well
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they get
feeling
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 of loss
on
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 patience
that is
 deduced by the
fast-pace
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 of communicational habits. While the Cyber Language Culture
such
 as abbreviation is appearing,
people
's reading
skills
that
is
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 in a bid to comprehend complex sentences fast is degrading.
Moreover
, what literally changed is the patience of young
people
. They are becoming
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inpatient
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 with less
of
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waiting time to others as there is a conversation. As far as I'm concerned, young
people
 especially those who are in a
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 life are supposed to think of balancing their
communication
 through tools and face to face interaction with others.
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