Some people believe that the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals are of the opinion that
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education assist graduates with satisfying employment while other
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of thought suggest that studying in
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the higher
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institution is more beneficial both to the scholar and environment. I agree that getting a
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degree is a very big plus for the individual and his
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immediate
surrounding. On the one hand, schooling in
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college
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a college
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impacts an individual in various ways. The person learns not just good moral
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but
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tolerance and management.
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, the scholar benefits from the teachings of his lecturer and these can be put into practice after graduation.
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,
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education helps an individual prepare for what is ahead in the future.
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, the engineering students of Niger Delta University are taken to various workshops all through their study years.
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, they are well prepared practically for the
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market and
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in return provide jobs that are satisfying.
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, the vital role of the tertiary institution in the community cannot be ignored.
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, the world at large benefits from the educational experience of its inhabitants by developing the society in different aspects.
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, graduates from Niger Delta University formed
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which helped the school generate an online platform to support undergraduate students develop their skills and talents.
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, individuals are kept busy to a great extent and the crime rate has reduced drastically. In conclusion,
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tertiary institution prepares the students to enable them
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good employment, I believe that it benefits the society to a very large extent as the scholar.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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