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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like the very much Why do people take part in dangerous sports Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers

#sports #people #part #suggestions #dangers
in
this
 modern era, a majority of
people
 want to become famous. Some players are playing
extreme
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an extreme
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 and dangerous
game
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games
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.
this
 essay will discuss the main reasons why
people
 play dangerous
sports
 and suggest
best
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the best
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 ways to reduce
this
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these
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 games.
To begin
 with, the main reason why
people
 play
this
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these
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 dangerous
sports
 is that they like to
taking
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 risks. They like to challenge their ability.
Firstly
, they push
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themselves
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them selves
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themselves
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 each and every day they feel satisfied when they
performs
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perform
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 dangerous
sports
 like boxing, riding mountain bikes and so on.
Secondly
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 if they perform very well
then
 they get
a
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apply
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fame and sometimes so many chances to win huge money and different prices
this
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 prices build them
confidence
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the confidence
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 to perform
next
 task well.
Finally
, After performing they get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from huge buildings they create
a headlines
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headlines
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 in newspapers and
in
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on
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 television news channels The solutions are not simple , while doing some stunts they have to keep safety equipment and experts.
Moreover
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 perform all the stunts after taking proper instructions and proper training. Some companies have to require a license for providing
such
 training. In my opinion,
people
 do
such
sports
 for fun,
however
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 some
sports
 performed after sufficient training.
Submitted by Aditya Patel on

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