In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about that?

These days some states in the US prohibited step out of
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tremendous
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while it has benefits to
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society. In
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I will look at the reasons behind my opinion
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. The main reason for me is that preventing
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from criminals. When someone under 18 years old going out without
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from
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, it could be prone to be attacked by
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burgers
or killers.
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, crimes
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police department which explain their view of releasing
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be safer. Another reason is that following
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under
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of
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. Studies show that hanging out with friends mainly at
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their
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moreover
,
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people are always at their houses after evening whereas
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persons tend to be out of their homes after day
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. In conclusion. imposing
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to not allowing teens to go out after day
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unless they have their parents with them, it
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prevents crimes that might
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to
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children
,
also
it plays role in terms of arranging teenagers
life
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  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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