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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In the modern
world
, presently computers are the basis and which needs to be implemented into classrooms where different programs are used for education purposes. But, in the case of different teaching modules, dependency on computers may result in a certain amount of danger to pupils. In
this
 essay, both issues need to be discussed. In my opinion, computers should be available especially in the classrooms, and the precise use of the
computer
 is necessary to compete with the
world
. On the one hand, the
computer
 is the base of the digital era and ought to be introduced into lessons for education purposes. It is actually nearer to impossible to cope up with the technological
world
 without a strong background in
computer
 and IT related knowledge.
For example
, anyone who does not know about the basic programming structure of a
computer
, excel, word file, and so on., he or she can not make complete any early work or assignments within a short time. Using a
computer
 can possibly finish a task or assignment in a quick manner.
On the other hand
, more dependencies on a
computer
 in the education sector may cause a certain degree of risk to
students
. It's a matter of great regrate that
although
computer
 gives our student many opportunities to accomplish the work and doing the complicated analyses by using software just within few minutes, excessive possession on a
computer
 may the reason for brain damage (thinking ability becoming lower day by day). Again, more screening time will be the cause of the psychological problem between
students
such
 as sleeping disorders.
Computer
 using increases the sitting time,
consequently
,
students
 may face some major health problems,
for instance
, obesity, diabetes including some other physical inactivity problems. In conclusion, regarding the good and bad sides of using a
computer
, the effective use of it can help our
students
 and the people's to achieve the final goal of our
world
.
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