Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are differing views regarding
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and cooperation. I believe the
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former approach is better because it forces
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to improve. Some
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prefer cooperation to
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because it allows the division of
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based on skills. Take,
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, the case of a team of nuclear engineering students working on designing a nuclear reactor. In order to do
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task, problems related to different fields of engineering must be solved, which is often too hard for a single individual. When there is a team involved,
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,
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massive workload can be divided between members based on their area of expertise.
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is not possible through
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as an individual has to do all the
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themselves, taking on a lot of burden in the process.
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, I think that if the workload is divided in
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way,
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will have difficulty learning skills they do not possess as they will always be forced to only
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on things they are familiar with.
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,
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compels an individual to do better. Consider the case of
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Entrance Exam Test that takes place in India each year, where students compete for a very limited number of seats available at public universities. The
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that students who partake in
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exam face forces them to study harder which, in turn, makes them better at the subjects they are taking tests on. The situation is similar at
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, where the race for promotion encourages employees to do better at their jobs than their colleagues.
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, in daily life,
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try to make more money than others to get better standing in society. I agree with
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argument because the heat of
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encourages personal growth in individuals, which helps them in all aspects of life. In conclusion,
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cooperation enables
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of
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with others
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their expertise, I believe it is more important to focus on
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as it forces a person to make progress.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction to guide your reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use transitions to connect paragraphs better. For example, 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' can help show the order of your ideas.
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Add a few more examples to support your points, especially in the section on cooperation to balance your arguments.
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The essay takes a clear position, stating a preference for competition, which is good for task achievement.
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The examples provided, such as the university entrance exam and team projects, are relevant and help illustrate your points well.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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