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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#dangers #people #habit #society
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It is popularly known by
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 that addictive behaviour
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 as smoking is harmful and considered a dangerous risk factor for health.
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, yet those dangers, many
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 are being adapted to
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habit
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 continuously. There are many causes of
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habit
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 which can be reduced by taking some immediate and effective steps. In
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 essay, both issues will be discussed. Some
people
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 continue with
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habit
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 to maintain social status and to make themselves smarter as compared to others. In some societies,
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 assume that smokeless
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 are less elegant than addicted
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. A majority of them
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 believe that smoking which contains tobacco can reduce the stress in their life.
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, some scientific research already established that smoking can lessen depression, stress for a little bit of time. Many ways can diminish the
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 of smoking in our society.
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, making anti-smoking advertisements on TV and other social media like Facebook, Twitter can reduce the smoking
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 in the community because it is already known that media has a strong effect on
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's mindset.
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, including the risks of doing smoking in school/college/university students textbooks
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 will be benefitted to reduce the smoking
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 because every student has some impact on their families.
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, stop the production of tobacco items can diminish it permanently.
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, Govt can create some strict laws which condemned the
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 who are accustomed to
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habit
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. To conclude, identifying its primary reasons and taking some immediate preventive steps by both Social organisations and the government can lessen the danger in our society,
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, in our families.
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, it will be the major reason for making the disastrous situation in our health sector which is
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 a part of our society.
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