The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree?

#government #money #railways #roads

Although

, many people believe that investment

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trains path would be more beneficial than spending money on roads. I think in

reverse

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manner and disagree

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the given statement. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. Out of all the arguments of miniseries to expand railways

instead

of roads, the strongest one to prove my view is people prefer saving

time

in transportation and utilise it in a fruitful manner.

This

is to say railways are

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slower than

road

journeys and

also

for small travelling

train

take more

time

than by

road

which would

be consider

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as a waster of precious

time

. A good example

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ahmedabad-

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vadodara

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expression way. if you

travell

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travel

from

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train

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it takes 3 hours whereas by

road

2 hours only and

also

road

yoy

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you

would directly reach your

destination

however

, by

train

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you

also

have to use some public transportation

too

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reach

destination

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and that

also

uses a

road

. The other reason to prove

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is in

this

fast life people

love

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to travel by

road

to explore each and every place that comes in between because it

give

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a chance to stop and enjoy more place rather than

direct

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destination

For example

, a person travelling by rail he directly stops at

destination

and he

don't

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have accessibility

other place

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which they might have visited and enjoy.

However

, I would not overlook

otherside

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other side

too.

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with,

train

journey

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would provide more comfort than

road

journeys in long runs as it has many space and sleeping cabins where

also

be available at

time

of booking .

Also

, driving a car for 2-3 days to reach other

destination

would be not good for health while by

train

it's give

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more relaxation.

Thus

, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite

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comfor

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comfort

and less physical activity in long runs, my reasons that

time

enjoying roadways journey would give more peace and enough

time

to enjoy new things in life.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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sustainability
environmental footprint
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