some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environment should no longer exist in 21st century.Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,
zoos
are very popular facilities for us and most people have visited the zoo
at least one time in their life. However
, it is fact that some people argue that zoos
are no longer exist in the 21st century due to their artificial environment. Given that there are some negative aspects, I personally do not think zoos
will disappear for the following reasons.
The function of the zoo
is not simple to raise money through the demonstration of animals
. However
it plays a role in protecting species. Add a comma
,However
Although
those who stand negative views about zoos
often propose to give animals
back to their original place namely a wild environment, it is also
true that human beings are catalysts of the destruction of nature. According to the scientific article, around 3 % of existing natures and around 1,500 species are on the brink of extinction every year due to our daily habits. In this
sense, even if the zoo
is surrounded by an artificial environment, it is significantly necessary to continue to exist especially for those animals
that are facing some risks.
Furthermore
, the zoo
contributes to the education of children. Nowadays, kids have less time to play outside due to school pressures for study or development computers and TV games. For instance
in Japan, it is very common that the school especially at the primary level arranges field trips to the zoo
and students not only study about habits of animals
but also
can be aware of the importance of natural reserves. Zoos
play a role in stimulating the sense of kids from various angles especially in the modern era.
To summarize, for the above reasons I do not think zoos
disappear in the 21st century, rather they should exist since they have a lot of merits as I aforementioned. What people always should take into account is not simply to criticise zoos
, but it is necessary to see and resolve the bottlenecks of the reason why we need zoos
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