Some people think the main benefit of international cooperation is in the protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefits are in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people argue that the environment is protected by international
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, and believe that world business is preserved.
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essay will examine both views and explain why I lean towards the latter. On the one hand, there are two reasons why international
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plays a crucial role in environmental protection. The first is one binding environmental
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. Nowadays, many nationals exploit the environment in excess of the permission to make images
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the atmosphere causing environmental pollution.
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, the oil spill in
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oil well in 1979 in Mexico the number of oil spills
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to 140
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Gallons causing marine environmental pollution. Another reason, the international community can provide significant funding to environmental programs. These funds enable the creation, implementation, and ongoing support of significant climate change projects,
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as, the World Bank
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millions of dollars each year to global efforts focused on tracking climate changes, conserving wildlife, and stopping deforestation.
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, I side with those who think that the primary value
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national
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is international commerce.
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the foremost explanation is the facilitated flow of commodities. The most obvious is that when Vietnam exports rice and cloth to countries like China, it will be partially reduced.
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, trade organizations help solve international disputes, allowing companies to expand and develop the economy. Another thing is that it leads to technological advancements that drive economic progress.
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,
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nations, international business partnerships are crucial for growth and reducing poverty. In conclusion,
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some people say that the majority of the advantages of the environment
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protected by international
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, I am of the opinion that
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of national
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commerce.

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Check your introduction to make sure it clearly states your opinion.
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You have introduced two views and given your opinion, which is good.
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You have included some examples, which help support your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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