Doctors should be responsible for educating their patient about how to improve their health. Do you agree?

Doctors are trained professional individuals who treat
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of diseases. One of their roles is to educate their patient. Some people believe as doctors
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mainly their responsibility. I partially agree with
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who can educate
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to improve their health. There are other professionals who can help like for examples Nurses. Nurses have more interactions with the patients rather than with
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they can assess the needs of their
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and can help in educating them regarding their health. Nutritionist and
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can help improving they eating lifestyles that can help improve peoples health. Another reason is
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and
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self how to stay healthy. Families
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can be a support to the patients. In conclusion,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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