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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, there are more and more mothers
work
 outside and
fathers
 take care of their
children
 at home. From my point of view, several reasons cause
this
 situation and
such
 phenomenon is a positive development. Two causes contribute to the exchange of parents’ roles. For one thing, technology development makes it possible for
women
 to qualify for more jobs that could only be done by men in the past. In
this
 case,
women
 have the opportunity to earn more money so as to support their families. For another, at one time,
fathers
 think it is trivial to take care of their
children
, and they think they should devote their time to
work
, but most parents now agree that fatherhood is indispensable in the development of
children
, so more
fathers
 are willing to spend time with their
children
 and even become full-time
fathers
. In my view, some advantages would come with
this
 social trend. One of them is that
this
 phenomenon could develop gender equality.
This
 situation has changed in the past when men earn money to support their families,
women
 were mainly responsible for caring for
children
, but now it is based on personal preferences and ability to
work
 to decide who works from home and who works outside.
Therefore
, Competent
women
 can afford to spend the whole family and Men can be aware of the arduous job of their wife when he taking care of their
children
 that make them more respectable toward her.
In addition
, if
fathers
 stay at home and look after
children
, it would become an important contribution to their
children
's upbringing, which
fathers
 are more likely to educate their
children
 about setbacks than their mothers, giving them the courage to overcome difficulties and helping to foster their ability independent in the future. In conclusion, several reasons make mothers
work
 outside while
fathers
 are full-time
fathers
, and I think
this
 change is advantageous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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