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Band 6.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I disagree with
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 opinion that
people
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 are not going to buy
newspapers
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 or
books
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, because of
this
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 reason which is online
website
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 has monthly payments,
however
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, there are some
websites
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 that have sorts of
information
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 for free
such
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 as
books
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 or
newspapers
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. Most of the
websites
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 that publish
books
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 or magazines charge
people
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 a monthly payment. These
websites
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 not only share sorts of
information
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 free but
also
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 receive a monthly
membership
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 from their customers who are online.
For example
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, Hamshahri newspaper in my country Iran receives some
money
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 every single month from
people
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 who enjoy using their
information
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 and want to read magazines or
books
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 online. In
this
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 way,
people
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 cannot stop buying
this
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 sort of
information
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 without paying any
money
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 because the
website
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 that they are using charges them every month.
On the other hand
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, there are some
websites
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 that share
information
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 for free to their members.
This
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 kind of
website
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 does not have so much
information
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 free, their contents are not valuable they
also
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 do not update
books
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 or news and their contents are old. If these free
websites
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 want to share new
information
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 namely,
books
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 or
newspapers
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, receive some
money
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 for that or
in other words
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 sell them.
For example
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, Audible, an application which has so many
books
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 and podcasts only shares free podcasts on the
website
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 but for
books
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,
people
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 have to buy a
membership
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 every three months or have an Amazon
membership
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. So on
this
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 occasion,
people
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 only can use podcasts and to receive
books
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 they need a
membership
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 too. In conclusion, I cannot say I agree for sure, even though there are so many kind of
websites
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 that provides every kind of content like
books
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 or
newspapers
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 and
also
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 magazines without receiving any
money
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. Thereby,
people
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 cannot stop buying
books
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 but they can receive a limited amount of them for free.

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coherence and cohesion
To improve the logical structure, try to organize your ideas in a clearer progression. Consider using clearer topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are comprehensively supported with clear, detailed examples or further explanation. This will enhance the clarity and depth of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion that clearly address the topic.
task achievement
Positive use of examples, such as the mention of Hamshahri newspaper in Iran and Audible, effectively support your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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