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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Over the past half-century, the world had become more globalized as
people
 from different countries could purchase the same
products
 as their counterparts around the world. While
this
 trend could bring benefits for
people
 in various aspects, I believe it as well a negative development in some
way
.
Firstly
, it is true that being highly globalized could benefit
people
 in an economic
way
 and in a practical
way
. With regards to the former, most multinational corporations choose to set the factories and built their office buildings in the country where they try to sell
products
.
Therefore
, similar
products
 selling in countries all over the world, not only could provide tons of job opportunities for local
people
 as the economy of the country could boost but
also
 it could save a good deal of money for big companies since it will spare a lot of costs in logistics and so on.
In addition
,
people
also
 could save a fortune to buy high-quality
products
 that are less pricey than before since the production company had already set their factories in the local area.
On the other hand
, it
also
 poses negative effects on several aspects.
First
, introducing the big company and the price of their
products
 are usually below the overage price since their mass production model help to reduce the costs.
This
 will definitely affect local businesses in a bad
way
. What is more, it is
also
 a big blow to the development of traditional
products
 including food, costumes.
This
 is because most
people
 will be attracted to the
products
 of big corporations. In conclusion, I think that
products
 globalization is a positive development in an economic
way
, but it
also
 could be detrimental to the local tradition and culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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