Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There are many concerned individuals who feel that children should learn good manners from their
parents
. Others,
however
,
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that
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system should teach their students to become more responsible towards our society. I completely agree with the former statement and in
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essay, I will support my view with examples. Focusing on teenagers good behaviour, we can say that school plays a crucial role. There are many schools
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conduct classes to teach students basic
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.
For example
, personality development, character building. These tutions will help them to grow their characters.
Also
, physical
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can improve students physical fitness and
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class room
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sessions teach them to become more
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in life. Due to schools, kids learn how to interact with each other and that improves their communication skills and general knowledge.
On the other hand
, despite learning necessary topics in school, few important things they do learn by observing their
parents
.
For example
, If
parents
are spending more time on their mobile devices
then
kids tend to copy that and
instead
of playing outdoor games or
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studying
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they
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to spend their time on mobile devices.
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Environment
at home
also
helps in building children's mental health. In
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conclusion
, I strongly believe that the collaborative efforts of
parents
and universities can ameliorate the situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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