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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Social networking websites are considered to have destructive consequences on
people
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 and
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society by the majority. I partially agree
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 statement and the reasons
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 my partial agreement are discussed in the following paragraphs. On one hand, it is indeed the fact that
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social networking has become an addiction. It means that the majority of
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 time of an individual is devoted to scrolling the news feeds and chatting with
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.
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, users are glued to
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 sites as an immense pleasure is experienced by them when they utilize the features of social
media
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.
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,
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 fake posts and comments by some individuals
leads
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 to social disputes.
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 is because since the
people
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 of every country and religion exist on social
media
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, it becomes the most effective platform to execute the intentional disputes among religions and societies by posting
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offensive
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content
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.
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, a post shared by an Individual of an unreal execution of
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 Indian citizen in an Islamic country
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 Indians to protest against that nation which
subsequently
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 was ended when that post was found untrue.
On the other hand
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, there are myriad ways in which the
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exposure
 to
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social
media
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 has been beneficial for both individuals as well as society.
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, the communication barrier due to the long distances between
people
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 is eliminated. It means, no matter in which nation our loved ones are residing
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, they can easily be contacted through voice call, chat, and
vedio
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video
 calls on platforms like Facebook and
twitter
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Twitter
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.
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, a feature of being able to interact with any person irrespective of the nation he or she belongs to
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 minimizes cultural gaps and brings different societies together.
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, social network usage has brought
people
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 and culture together. In conclusion, it is indeed the fact that
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social
media
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 has become an addiction and
also
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 provides a platform
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for the execution of some severe disputes in society,
however
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, the communication gaps are entirely bridged while bringing the different
socities
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societies
 together.

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