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In many countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of crime. However, another effective way is to provide people with a better education so that they cannot become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whenever we open the newspaper or news channel, we can see
crime
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 everywhere in the world. From a small age, we should educate the child about the things which we cannot do. In many countries,
jail
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 is the best solution to the problem of
crime
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. I agree with the above statement, and I will explain why in the following essay. As far as I am concerned,
punishment
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 is the best option for the
crime
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. If they will not get the
punishment
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 they will repeat the
crime
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 again in the same form or the other form.
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, if a thief takes small things from one place, no one can catch them, that will give him to take more precious items from the very
next
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 time onwards. A correctional facility is the best way of
punishment
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. Through the
jail
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, they will get an education regarding the
crime
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 that he did. Once they enter the prison, they feel isolated from their normal life which includes family, friends and relatives. They will lose their freedom as well. Because of the strict
jail
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 rules, they may decide to become good for the rest of their life. The thief will think, he could have worked out of the
jail
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 and earn more money and take care of their family, if he was out the prison. Based on the facts which I outlined above, I strongly agree that the
punishment
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 in the form of a correctional facility is the best solution to
crime
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 than we give only education to the criminals.
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