A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is irrefutable that,
people
from different nationalities have
inseparable
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role
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in
economical
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and social development of a
country
.
However
, few native populace
believe
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that migrate population is a burden to the financial growth of their
country
. In my opinion,
people
from different nations is essential to
speed-up
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development
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of our
country
. There are a plethora of benefits to a nation by allowing
people
to migrate from other parts of the world.
Firstly
, it allows highly skilled
people
who have expertise in modern technology to migrate, and their capabilities can be utilized for technical enhancement.
For instance
, the inputs of skilled immigrants in the advanced
of
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technical
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sector in North American countries like
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States and Canada is unquestionable.
Furthermore
, these
people
will be highly educated and their immense knowledge can be made use of in developing educational sectors.
In addition
,
this
helps in cultural advancement as well. Interestingly, our source of entertainment has widened as
these mixed culture
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will
upbring
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bring
a new genre of art, music and literature.
On the other hand
, few local nationalities strongly believe that
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number
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of immigrants can lead to
financial
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disparity. They reckon, that
this
highly skilled crowd are more capable, and they can grab more jobs opportunities compared to less skilled natives, which in turn can shove them into poverty.
For example
, health care sector in
UK
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, within past few decades have hired thousands of software engineers from India who are comparatively less paid,
repercussion
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is highly paid localities lost their job. In conclusion, even though there are minor drawbacks in
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count
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of mixed nationals, those numerous benefits
overshadows
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these cons. Highly skilled and talented citizens are required for
cultural
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the cultural
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and technical growth of a
country
.
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