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Some people think that a sense of competition should be encouraged in children. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Competition
 makes people more efficient in terms of memorizing things, rather
understanding
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 them properly,
however
 pleasing
children
 to co-operate in being
mennerfully
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manner fully
 can generate a
sense
 of responsibility in them. Here we discuss both views and at the
end
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 I will give my opinion. There is no question about a
sense
 of
competition
 makes people more efficient in terms of any subject to expertise and there are multiple benefits of
competition
 that can increase
persons
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 capabilities.
Such
 as athletes, we can see
that
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in Olympics we witnessed some of the great athletes of
the
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history. Behind any
sport
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persons
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success
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 there was a master
which
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 guides, motivates and grooms that athlete. If
athlete
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the athlete
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 had been through proper grooming and
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well
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well-practised
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practiced
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 he or she can achieve great lengths and win a medal. We are witnessing nowadays some very basic benefits of
competition
,
such
 as in markets as consumers we saw a variety of options for the same thing. Good
competition
organisation
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 upgrading themselves day by day and consumers are benefiting from it.
On the other
hand
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 if we insist
children
 and groom in
such
way
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 it can be
life changing
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 for them. Insisting
children
to
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behave in a manner create a
sense
 of responsibility by which they can better understand their own flaws and strengths. Banda standing better on flaws
they
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can be a better judge of their own actions. By
this
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 a
sense
 of responsibility towards the environment is being generated in
children
.
For
example
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 if we groom a child
well developed
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 thoughts and responsibly we can turn into
a tremendous entrepreneurs
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tremendous entrepreneurs
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 with great ideas
that
is
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 beneficial for
humans
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 and nature both. All in all
in my opinion
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 I would like to agree with the idea of letting
children
 use their own imagination to create
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decision
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 for themselves
make
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 them into
a
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better
person
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people
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 rather than winning a
competition
.
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