You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: 1. Say that you liked their photos of your family 2. Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event. 3. Give them the details of the event.
Dear Luo Yang,
Hello, I hope you are well. I am writing
this
letter to extend my sincere thanks to you for mesmerizing photos. On top of that, we decided to invite you to our important family event.
Two years ago my family and I traveled
to where the movies "My Journey To You" and "THE END of ENDLESS LOVE" were made. Chinese has a lot of incredible seas. Change the spelling
travelled
This
was place beautiful ocean. We had some photos taken by a professional photographer, that is
you.
I would like to ask you to come to our rite family occasion. After that, we invited many famous singers from China. For instance
, Wang Leehom, Li Yuchun, Faye Wang, and so on. We would be very happy if you could come to our great family ceremony. I cordially invite you to join us.
We are planning to celebrate integral family service on the beach. For a reason, the sea is blue like in the sky and so beautiful.
I would appreciate it if you would look into this
letter as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your letter begins with a proper salutation to the addressee, in this case, it was done well with 'Dear Luo Yang.' However, to improve task completion, make sure your letter directly addresses each point in a clear and logical order, maintaining focus on the task demands.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, try to create smoother transitions between your ideas and paragraphs. Starting a new paragraph for each task prompt can help, but also linking sentences to provide a more natural flow will improve the overall quality of your writing. Phrases such as 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to this,' or 'Regarding the event…' could be useful.
Task Achievement
While your writing tone is mostly suitable, you could further polish it by ensuring consistent formality and avoiding colloquial language that may seem out of place in a semi-formal letter. Also, specificity in details, like providing the exact date, time, and location of the event, enhances task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-executed, but the body of the letter can be improved by ensuring that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea that directly responds to the task prompts. This will help in keeping your letter focused and making it easier for the reader to follow.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,