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Doctors of some countries say that people nowadays do not get enough physical exercises. What are the causes? What are the solutions.

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It is believed by physicians of some nations that these days,
people
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 are unable to do physical activities.
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 essay shall delve into the reasons for
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 phenomenon and
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 suggest some measures to address
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 problem. There are several reasons why
people
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 do not get sufficient time to do (perform) exercise.
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 with, hectic
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 schedules and long working hours are the major contributing factors, owing to which
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 develop a sedentary lifestyle.
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, they neglect their fitness. Another major reason is the lack of awareness about the benefits of daily workouts among
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.
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, it has been observed in a recent health survey that
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 who do a regular activity, jogging barely suffer from stress or arthritis. A
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 reason is an advanced technology which has reduced the physical
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 as compared to the past.
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, these days mostly
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 via computers or automated equipment which has limited manual
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. To exemplify, in earlier times, our ancestors used to
work
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 in the fields, but
people
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 are now more prone to automated machines. To add to it, if
people
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 get leisure time, they tend to watch TV or to play computer games
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 of doing physical movements. There are certain steps that the government can adopt to indulge
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 in physical activities.
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, the authorities should launch a campaign in order to motivate the public to do exercise at least twice a week.
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, the government should organize fitness activities
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 as yoga and Zumba sessions to encourage individuals to participate in some exercises.
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, IT companies provide employees gym facilities 24/7 to promote health benefits.
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, by changing the mode of transportation,
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 can walk or ride bicycles to commute short distances, which is a wise use of the time to keep them fit. To conclude, while there are many reasons why working
people
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 are unable to do adequate workouts, certain measures can be taken to mitigate
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 issue.
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