Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Parents of today's generation encourage their

kids

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to be independent.

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some people believe

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practice will

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in a negative way in

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run, others believe it is important for the child to be independent. In

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views and will

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my opinion on

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argument. On one hand, we have parents who feel that their

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understand what's good and what's bad for themselves. The pattern of upbringing has evolved over

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, I am 27-years-old, when I was young my mother decided on what I eat, wear and watch on television;

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, my

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are free to put on

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what ever

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clothes they are comfortable in or choose their dinner item. I

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personally

feel it is really important for the

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to correct

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their mistakes and make the best choice.

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kids

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will be able to learn from their mistakes and be self-dependent

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their life choices.

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, some argue that

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practice will provide unnecessary

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where they might feel they know everything, whereas, in most

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it is not true.

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, a kid will not respect their parent as much because they feel they are matured enough and do not need any help. Which

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a considerable negative effect and a cause of concern.

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a chance

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become arrogant. To conclude, I feel it is positive to encourage a toddler to look after themselves;

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, a child cannot be independently completely. It is a task for the adults to be a shadow. I feel the advantages of

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will surely overshadow the disadvantages

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