the graphs shows the international users of internet from 2010 to 2017.

the graphs shows the international users of internet from 2010 to 2017.
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The graphs illustrate the usage of
internet
by the Denny Johns between the years 2010 and 2017 and the percentage of web customers in the world in 2018 .The data has been calibrated in millions.
Overall
,the number of web customers were rising during the period,
whereas
in the USA and
Canada
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the maximum percentage of people were using the
internet
in 2008. In 2010, worldwide
internet
purchasers were evaluated
around
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26 million which
were
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increasing gradually up to the year 2014 at 195 million.After that, a sudden escalation was seen in the
internet
operators in the years 2014 and 2015.
Moreover
, there was seen an increment in
internet
service consumers from 2015 to 2017. Turning to a pie chart, the US and Canada consumed the maximum proportion of the
internet
in 2018.
moreover
, the number of people using the
internet
in Europe was less than a quarter of the total users in the world.
Furthermore
, Asia, the Pacific and South America collectively contributed more than 1/5 of the total percentage,
whereas
the Middle East and Africa had the least
internet
users in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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