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Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. Write both view and your opinion

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The people around the world are fond of celebrations and making
noise
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 is an indispensable part of these celebrations.
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, many believe that generating
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 amount of
noise
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 should be controlled. In my opinion, there is no specific need to control the freedom of
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individuals to celebrate.
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 with, festivals are an inseparable part of our culture. There
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 a myriad of festivals that we celebrate annually. Using the
fire crackers
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 and high volume musical instruments are unavoidable
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 these occasions and it generates tremendous
noise
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.
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, during the new year
night
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 the crowd welcomes the novel year with a plethora of enthusiasm and
noise
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.
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, they
makes
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 high voice to express their emotions.
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, while partying,the youths play highly noisy music to get into that elevated mood, which creates a joyful atmosphere.
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, there are fewer disadvantages of
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 vocal disturbances.
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, the high decibel volume created by the horn and the engine of the vehicles
cause
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 air pollution. The repercussion is,
community
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the community
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 might have to face mental and physical illness if they are constantly exposed to
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 polluted air.
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, a survey conducted
last
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 year the New york city illustrated that approximately 10
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 of the crowd suffering from
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hearing loss is caused by
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noise
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 pollution. In conclusion, I would like to iterate that, even though there are negligible drawbacks while producing the
noise
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, the merits overshadow the demerits. I do believe that
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society should be given
freedom
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the freedom
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 to express
there
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 emotions and make
those special moment
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that special moment
those special moments
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 memorable by making noises.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • mental and physical well-being
  • hearing loss
  • sleep disturbances
  • stress levels
  • freedom of expression
  • cultural expression
  • social interactions
  • economic benefits
  • property values
  • tourism and hospitality
  • entertainment and construction industries
  • thoughtful noise regulations
  • public health
  • economic and cultural considerations
  • zone-based noise control
  • flexibility
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