Some people belive that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Society always provides us comfort and knowledge of our culture and etiquettes. It is our job to give them something in return. So there is a school of thought who

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belives

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that

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generation

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should do some of society's

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voluntarily and for free as it will not only help our community but

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in the development of our youth. I personally completely agree with

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thought and

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essay.

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, our communities always

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various organisations which helps people in

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providing food to homeless people or old age houses or orphanages etc.

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organisations

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on donations and trust funds which always keeps them

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. In

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case, when teenagers apply for doing

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here voluntarily and for free it will not only

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them to improve their behaviours but it

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provide

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relief to

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organisations as they don't have to hire

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to do

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for them.

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, when

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generation

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starts working with

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communities it helps them to develop character.

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, it develops

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of helping others, aware

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problems in society and it creates

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in their

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it helps them to keep them busy and away from other distractions. Namely, it keeps them away from drug abuse, violence etc.

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people in their

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are always competitive in every

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so when they start

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here they can compete with each other and get more and more

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done. Not only that but they set good examples and

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create perfect good role models for their

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and the

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. To sum up, I reiterate that

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this communities

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should come up with some kind of rewards to motivate children who

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good

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without any desire to get anything in return. Not but least it will help them to bring

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community

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closer and understand it's problems at deeper levels.

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Some people belive that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Many people around the world use social media to keep in touch with other people and get new events. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that they should spend the money they earn now enjoying life, while others think that the money should be put into savings for the future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Of late, it is believed that students studying in secondary school and high school should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this argument?

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