Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones in schools. Do you agree or disagree? Give explanations and examples for your response.

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school
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children have mobile
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these days. Some
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think that teenagers should not be allowed to
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them in schools. I agree with
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idea because mobile
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may disturb their studies, reduce their
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to interact with friends, and have
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impact on their health.
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with,
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cannot concentrate on their
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studies
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if they can
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mobile
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during the lectures. They can get notices of apps when they get messages from friends and some
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may
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too much
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them when they are waiting for replies from others.
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, the recent survey shows that junior high
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students
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who do not bring their
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to their own study rooms have higher scores
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the exam than
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who bring.
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, though mobile
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are sometimes useful for study, it is clear that it has a negative impact on their grades.
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,
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is the place not only teaching some subjects,
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as math or English
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but
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teaching
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moral and the communication skill. Using
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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at
school
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increases
students
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time
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to spend by themselves,
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watching YouTube or social media, and communicating
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will not be improved. There is
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research which shows that
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who spent their
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days with friends tend to be less get angry than
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who had shorter
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with
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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.
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, it is beneficial for
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to spend much more
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with their classmates, not
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phones
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on phones
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. At
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, it is not good for their health, especially
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their eyes
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. Mobile
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emit radiation called blue light, and it affects
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the eyes
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negatively. Recently, there are blue cut glasses which can cut 70% of those light, but without these glasses, it is said that
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have more possibilities to get some eye disease when they get older than 50.
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,
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school
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the school
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should limit their
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to
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devices during their
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daytime
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time
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. In conclusion,
although
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there are a lot of
students
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who has their own mobile
phones
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, I agree with the idea that they shouldn’t
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them at
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school
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, since it has bad influences on their grades, communication skills and health.
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