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Recently we are facing increasing number of cars, which poses great threat to the pedestrians and cyclists. What's more, a lot of parks need to be sacrificed as a result of the construction of railways and superhighways. Do you agree or disagree? What do you think is the best solution to satisfy residents to their heart's content?

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As society develops, an increasing number of
cars
 are being driven on roads. Some hold that
this
 will affect citizens' life and turn parks into railways and superhighways. Personally, I think these are really two serious problems and measures should be taken to solve them.
To begin
 with, more
cars
 are a threat to pedestrians and cyclists. Their right of way infringed, they will have to be extremely cautious when crossing roads. More
cars
 will
also
 give rise to air pollution and noise pollution which would probably cause damage to their respiratory and auditory systems.
Moreover
, with parks transformed into railways and superhighways, there will be fewer recreation centres, so that residents can no longer go for a walk when back home tired from work. To make things worse 3 living nearby a highway will certainly be detrimental to sleep.
Therefore
, measures should be taken to reduce the
use
 of private
cars
. Among vehicle restriction, rising petrol prices, and encouraging the
use
 of public transportation, the
third
 is the best solution. Vehicle restriction will make the most impact on the middle-class while having no obvious influence on the rich and government officials. Even if petrol prices go up,
cars
 will still be in
use
 as long as there is a need for them.
However
, raising public awareness can solve the problem by the roots. Once the public has the awareness to
use
 fewer
cars
, walkers and bicycle riders can enjoy more space on the road； meanwhile, more land can be spared for parks for residents" relaxation. To sum up, an increasing number of
cars
 is a serious problem, which will bring much pressure on citizens' life. So, we should take measures to tackle
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pedestrians
  • Cyclists
  • Threat
  • Superhighways
  • Railways
  • Urban planning
  • Green spaces
  • Traffic congestion
  • Air pollution
  • Car ownership
  • Reduced quality of life
  • Recreation
  • Wildlife
  • Climate regulation
  • Public transport systems
  • Pedestrian zones
  • Cycling lanes
  • Carpooling
  • Electric vehicles
  • Alternative modes of transportation
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