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It is important to be concerned about international events, even if those events have no direct impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#events #impact #lives
It is a common belief that
people
 don’t fundamental to pay attention to occurrences in the world as long as they are unlikely to directly impact our lives.
However
, I firmly believe that
people
 should concern about international
events
.
this
 is because knowledge of international
events
 allows
nations
 to assist other
countries
 and have a better understanding of how to deal with problems in our society.
To begin
 with,
citizens
 can help others who meet difficulties if they keep up with occurrences in other
nations
 of the world. Unfortunately, disasters, crises, conflicts happen in many places around the globe. By paying attention to these
events
, it is possible to share resources to assist others to help them overcome challenges.
For instance
, the 2020 Vietnam was seriously impacted by the pandemic covid-19, at that time they obtained a lot of aids from other
nations
such
 as supporting medical types of equipment, medicines, vaccines, thanks for those help many
people
 saved. That makes a connect the close relationship of
nations
. On top of that, the government better understands how to cope with problems in the community. Plenty of
countries
 must face to face similar social issues and looking to see the
countries
 which experienced how they succeed or fail to provide effective solutions. By way of example, there are a larger number of
countries
 are facing with many
citizens
 have unemployed, taking information from that case, other
countries
 can open necessary skills class for work and encourage
people
 to learn and improve knowledge. That helps decline amount of
citizens
 who have not employment and develop the ability of
people
. To sum up, understanding what is occurring in other
countries
 provide useful to aid other
citizens
 in the global and have beneficial solutions to approach the troubles. For these reasons, once again I support the idea that
citizens
 need to spend their time to take information from
events
 all over the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concerned
  • international events
  • direct impact
  • awareness
  • global understanding
  • empathy
  • indirect impacts
  • informed
  • global issues
  • contribute
  • solutions
  • ignorance
  • narrow-mindedness
  • cultural insensitivity
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