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Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that people are becoming more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The belief that modernity has fostered interdependence over-dependence can only be viewed from a personal perspective. Human relationships, whether more intimate or isolated impact the general public in different ways. I would say that individuals in modern society can be deemed both ‘more dependent’ and ‘more independent’, depending on the aspects of
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 from which they view society today. From the perspective of material
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, the younger generation does appear to be more reliant upon others to assist them in coping with the very real problems that
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 today presents. The youngsters today, particularly
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 residing in metropolitan cities, are frustrated by prohibitively high living costs like rental rates and various bills, which forces them to share flats with peers or remain living under the same roof with their parents even after finding gainful employment. Worse still, even those with higher incomes may not survive without others’ help. The increasingly fast-paced workplace has locked many commuters into a
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 of office over time, which leads to dependence on babysitters or family members to support their personal household – whether these be childcare, cleaning and household maintenance. So, even though independently wealthy, they must
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.
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 not the whole story – from another spectrum, modern society has
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 promoted self-reliance in individuals. The
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 pressures mentioned above may
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 engender the solitary
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; there are those who prefer to live alone.
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 priority would lead them to rent a low-cost apartment and forego a family. Away from the economic concern, intellectual independence is another issue: Accessibility to information and protocols in the digital environment allows modern individuals to scrutinize divergent views and
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 develop their own opinions, rather than merely being passive followers of others’ voices. It is my opinion,
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, it is the personal
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 choices and values that motivate people to be more or less independent in today’s world; these
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 choices will govern their proclivity toward dependence or independence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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