Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for e.g. working for a charity improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that schools must set up programs for
students
to participate in community service without earning money. I do agree with this
statement because not only students
can exploit this
chance but also
students
realize how to manage their time
better.
Firstly
, although
they may not earn any money, they are likely to take more advantages as a professional employee in the future. For instance
, students
who spend time
at the workplace might be engaged in some jobs as a part of a team that helps them to do their duties accurately, so in their future careers they will respond to these tasks quite better.
Another point to consider is that students
would learn how to use their free time
in the right ways due to
working, which makes them more organized in their lives. In particular
, while
they work long hours at work, they realize that the time
that can be spent with others such
as family and friends is limited so they may appreciate their spare time
more and more. Consequently
, this
approach may affect pupils' attitude completely to think about their goals and how those aims can be attained by making plans in their free time
. Also
spending time
in seminars, lectures, or talking with people who have enough knowledge and they know in what way people can be successful might be another positive point of using spare time
.
In conclusion, students
will be able to find many opportunities by working and using their free time
in ways that would be helpful.Submitted by sarmastsobhan1994 on
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