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Although nowadays people are reading news through internet, newspaper still remain of value.do you agree or disagree .

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It is Implicit that in today fast-paced life the trend of people is reading
news
 through the
internet
 has grown at an exponential rate.some like-minded individuals foster
this
 thinking that magazines still remains of value.my views are in harmony with
this
 ideology. The following paragraph tends to highlight some important aspects of
this
 issue. There are numerous arguments surrounding my viewpoint.
Although
 the most important factor that needs to be considered is that flick study through the
internet
 can not only contribute to it is irrefutable that the rise of the
internet
 has brought a sea change in the field of information and technology. But
also
 lead to numerous other benefits in various fields.
in other words
. It is asserted that paper still remain of value.,
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However
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 I tend to believe that in spite of facing a serious challenge from the
internet
for example
 according to report published by the magazine 2011 edition, the proportion of information and technology has increased by 80% The play role in society. Another Kay justification for supporting
this
 notion is that
internet
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 and
news
is
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 only likely to help one thrive and excel in the varied area by local
news
, movies and entertainment in the local area,local sporting and other events are best assessed through the printed paper needless to say long with the wide range of advantages it offers
although
 nowadays people are reading
news
 through
internet
 The newspapers can be found almost everywhere.
for instance
, some scientific research undertaken by the prestigious universities has asserted that the growth of
news
 and the
internet
 is positive with overall development The plays a keys role in society. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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