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Some parents but their children whatever they ask for , and allow their children to do whatever they want . Is this a good way to raise children ? What consequences could this type of parenting have for children as they grow older ?

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Growing with
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 era of modernization , many
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 took place in our surroundings
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 as variations in behaviour , physical
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 , atmospheric
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 and so on .
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 in behaviour can be related to anger issues and uninvolved parenting habits . Negligence includes fulfilling each and every unnecessary wish of their young
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 in order to make them happy or even
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 can be defined as bribing their own pupils . To commence with , the role of
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 since earlier times is meant to be strict , mature and have a stronghold on their young
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 . In earlier times a father was always the head of the family and all the vital decisions were to be approved by him and had a boundary line with their
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 . ,
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 the
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 respected their fathers to the fullest that they never had the courage even to argue with him , they were even quiet only by one stare of their father . Mother's
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 were calm and sensible and we're mostly housewife's but ,
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 their
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 respected their mothers and
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 helped her in each and every household work and in many other ways the could lower her burden . The
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 who grew up with strict
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 tend to have
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brighter
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 rather than
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 who had neglectful
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 or were left all by themselves in their childhood .
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 joint families can play a crucial role to raise a responsible juvenile as there are so many elderly and experienced people to guide or look after ,
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 are
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 keenly closer to their family members as they get a lot of attention , love and affection from the warmer hands
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 grandparents . Recently , the parenting methods had changed a lot , neither there is any sense of respect towards
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 nor much love and Affection is found .
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 in lieu of politely requesting things they won't tend to be stubborn and are recklessly arguing with their
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 . In
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 case, only the
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 cannot be blamed as
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 is all a fruitless result of negligence .
Children
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 should be provided with limited stuff only, rather than giving them everything they ask for . Each and every wish should not be fulfilled as they should learn the sense of adjusting with less and will become comparatively mature and responsible. Fulfilling each and every wish of their young
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 is a bad
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 to raise them as
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way
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children
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 would become stubborn and later on will create annoying and shameful situations that won't be easy to bear as a parent .
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 , the best
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 to raise young
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 is to become friends with them and si by setting a boundary line for both
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 and
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 in order to maintain a sense of respect and love . In
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 ,
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 they will learn various worldly values
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 as adjusting and
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 being satisfied with what they have . They will not only be mature and responsible but
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 respect their
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 and other elders .
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