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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, a death warrant is merely a significant way to control criminal activities in society as the number of barbaric crimes has been increasing day by day which makes an environment less impregnable. It is always a dreadful act for humanity to kill another person. In the upcoming ,paragraphs I will prove my point of view
that is
 why I reckon, capital punishment is imperative. To embark upon, many culprits do gothic crimes
such
 as molestations, rapes, heavy thefts and murders without any fear. They believe that the constitutional system is delicate and set them free after 5 to 15 years of imprisonment which persuades other dealbreakers to do similar haughty acts and make a community a less safe place to live.
On the contrary
, If a criminal gets judicial execution it will afraid other people to think twice to infringe the precedent. A study conducted by Germany in 2016 concluded that 40% of murder cases have been decreased when a murderer is hanged to death after a proven accusation of killing a teenage girl.
Besides
this
, government spend a high budget on putting wrongdoers behind the bars for a lifetime which can use in building schools or hospitals which provides huge benefits to the nation.
In addition
, it
also
 gives justice to innocent or the families of victims.
For instance
. A six years old boy was raped by 6 men in 2012 which was impossible to bear by the child's parents but they showed genuine gratitude to the lawmakers who provided justice and peace to them by electrocution of all 6 rapists. well yes, sometimes guilty-free get judicial penalties
although
, they proved innocent after their execution,
therefore
, it is plausible against killing other individuals under the name of order despite the fact,
,
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it we cannot make our society a protected and guarded place to live.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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