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Space travel has been made possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Conspicuously, in
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 modern era there are many new things are happening
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 technological and spacecraft developments that make it possible to
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 to
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 and many
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 believe that
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 for individuals will happen in the future.In
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 essay, I will try to explain why
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 will be both beneficial and negative development. The preponderant, the
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 exploration will have a positive impact as by exploring
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 the researchers get to know about the other planets
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 the variety of resources on the planets and they can use them when the earth's
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 need them.
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, the astronauts went to the Moon and explored that the moon has a place called Erupt of frozen
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 which is perfect for human use. The usable
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 on Earth is starting decreasing and when there is no
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 astronauts can fly there and get usable
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 for individuals.
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, the
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 on the blue marble planet can get their necessities and resources from other orbits as the population is consuming them very rapidly. Paradoxically,
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 exploration has a negative impact on the future as the population in our world is increasing rapidly and in future, if our planet becomes overpopulated
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 we will not afford
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travel
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 as we will use our money to produce food
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 produce job opportunities for the
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.
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, we need money in billions of dollars to send one spacecraft into
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.
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, if there is any
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 study program in the forthcoming
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 the government has to increase the tax on
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 public to cover its cost. In conclusion,
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travel
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 has both positive and negative impacts on
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 but we have to consider that it should give a financial burden to the public. So
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 analysis will be dependent on
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's needs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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