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Most famous athletes sign contracts to promote/advertise certain products. Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

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Successful players can not restrict themselves in one area, so renowned ones make a contract to introduce products in the commercials. İt has positive impacts overall despite some disadvantage that affects their fame.
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, the advertisements including sportsperson provide
companies
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 with more profits. Athletes generally owned millions of fans,
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 they are the
money
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 source for business. With sportsmen introducing the products,
people
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 could commence consuming them more eagerly, resulting in growth in selling rates and
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companies
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 earn millions of dollars.
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, famed as the speediest man in the world, Athlete Hussein Bolt introduces new Nike shoes and
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 an amount of purchasing them significantly boost in a short time.
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, not only
companies
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 have advantages but
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 athletes gain lots of
money
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 more than ones which can be obtained in sports competitions by exploiting
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 situation, leading to having convenience in their lives. Even if some commercials are prepared for engaging
people
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,sometimes they do not have corresponding effects on the
people
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. They are more likely to be intrusive advertisements.
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, athletes’ image in the
people
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’s minds mostly can be damaged, becoming notorious
people
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.
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, after the world cup in 2000, Zidane, who is known as a cool football player, played in absurd lemonade promotion and
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 was so ridiculous that
people
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 get about making him laugh with him. In my opinion, if
sports
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sportspeople
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people
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 opt to appropriate advertisements for themselves, either they can earn lots of
money
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 by making use of their fames or
companies
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 can gain
money
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. In conclusion,
companies
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 take advantage of the potency of athletes to make
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.
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, they can be influences related to types of advertisement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • sponsorship
  • brand
  • exposure
  • revenue
  • influence
  • authenticity
  • credibility
  • conflict of interest
  • negotiation
  • contracts
  • marketing
  • global audience
  • consumer behavior
  • consumer trust
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