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Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behavior. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Today’s technology-driven era has given rise to plentiful ways of amusement.
One
 school of thought is that fake fights broadcasted on various television channels should be treated as means of entertainment, whereas some think that it promotes a violent attitude amongst the
viewers
. I have compelling evidence to dismiss
such
 shows that depict
violence
.
This
 essay intends to discuss the rationale behind both views and underscores why
such
 shows could be fatal for those who make deliberate efforts to try the stunts and how
reel
Add the particle
to reel
show examples
 world
violence
 can fuel real-life aggressive behaviour. Some people opine that on-screen fight scenes provide a way to vent out the psychological frustration of the
viewers
 who are stressed with the daily monotony and mundaneness of life and work.
For example
, a survey reveals that more than sixty per cent of audiences reported that they are able to correlate their real-life anger or frustration with the small screen acts of
violence
 ,feeling relaxed and good after watching fictitious fights.
However
, I am strongly unconvinced of
this
 way of drawing relief which could
otherwise
 be achieved in other better ways,
such
 as exercising or biking as opposed to watching shows that telecast
violence
 which celebrates the dark side of society / which exhibits the regressive mindset of society. Having said
this
,
one
 question that intrigues me is how cinematic
violence
 could promote bad behaviour patterns not only in children but
also
 among adults?
One
 thing I could think of is, /Unfortunately, children are quick enough to imitate
such
 violent acts, jeopardizing their as well as others lives. In my personal experience, I remember a news headline depicting an incident where a young boy shot his father with a real revolver, mimicking the behaviour of his favourite character in the movie. Far more serious concern /What is more worrisome is
such
 content that portrays cold-blooded murder, dirty conspiracy, bloodshed,
violence
 would definitely inculcate criminal bent of mind in
viewers
, which will result in an inexorable upsurge in crime rate along with more severe consequences,
such
 as provoking people against each other and stirring up feelings of aggression among masses. All in all, even though on-screen fictitious
violence
 helps
viewers
 to get rid of their frustration and psychological stress, no
one
 can deny that
such
 shows put the peace and harmony of the society at stake and can compel people to become less inclusive and more intolerant towards their fellow residents that can be a blow to the brotherhood /unity of masses.
Therefore
, it is unjustifiable to see
such
 shows which can pose threat to the stability of the social fabric
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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