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Children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays, school fees have been rapidly increasing and it is becoming a burden for parents to educate their kids, where they need to rely on the government which is seen as a positive outcome for the progress of a
nation
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. Every child needs to have an equal
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 opportunity. It is important for a government to prioritize
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 as
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 where the future of the country depends on. It needs to be looked at as a long-term investment that helps to build a better
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, it enables to nurture talented individuals and provide them greater visibility globally.
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, valuable talents who received the stimulus will tend to stay and provide back to society.
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, countries with a lesser focus on
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 can always be seen to be lacking in development.
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, if there is no public focus on educating the
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, private companies will tend to turn it into a business.
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 will be disastrous as only the rich will get the chance to school their kids. Those in the poverty line will avoid it due to the cost and it will create a huge talent gap.
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, there will be different methods of teaching done in private compared to public schools which will not be focused on building a better
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, private schools that offer international syllabus will be more costly to go where only the rich would afford. In conclusion, the
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 ministry needs to have a huge budget focusing on developing the
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 need of their people ensuring equal opportunity for every child disregard of their status which in return will for a better future of the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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