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Some people are happy to spend the whole life living in same place. However, others prefer to live in many areas over their life time. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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In the actual world, we can see both ways of
spend
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 the
life
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posibles
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possible
. It's a matter of what
people
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 really like to choose if they want to spend the whole
life
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 living in
a
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 same place
,
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 or live in many areas over their
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lifetime
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life time
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lifetime
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. But in my opinion, we need to have a mix of
these kind
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this kind
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 of
life
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, to have a happy one. In the
last
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 few years, persons are looking
live
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 in many areas over their
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lifetime
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life time
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 like a reality. Nowadays, with the
posibility
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possibility
 of work remotely, from anywhere, many
people
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 are choosing
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 kind of
life
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.
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 "nomade" style, brings to the persons a sensation of freeness that inspire them, and increase their levels of
hapiness
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happiness
. Other
people
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, take
adventage
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advantage
 of their works to explore and travel around the world, knowing new places and interacting with different cultures.
In
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 the other hand,
people
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 who spend
the
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their
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 whole
life
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 living in the same place, have the chance to plan their
life
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 in a better way. Because they always keep their
life
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 in the same zone that they already
known
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, the
confort
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comfort
 zone. For some
people
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,
this
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 kind of
life
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, with a sensation of control, bring them all the
hapiness
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happiness
 they want. In
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 way, they don't need to move around the world to feel plenty. To conclude, for me both opinions have their advantages and disadvantage. But, in my
opinion
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 we can find more
hapiness
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happiness
 living in many areas over a part
the
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of the
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lifetime
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life time
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lifetime
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, enjoying and discovering new places, cultures and foods. Later at the final
courtain
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curtain
, spend the rest of the
life
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 living in
a
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the
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 same place, the one you found more interesting.

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