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Some people think that governments should increase the tax on unhealthy food to enhance public health. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many recent pieces of research have shown that unhealthy
food
, including fast
food
 and processed
food
, is not suitable for health and may cause Obesity. Obesity is considered the mother of many diseases
such
 as diabetes and high blood pressure.
Therefore
, some
people
 argue that the Government should impose a levy to reduce the purchase of unhealthy
food
. In my opinion, it is not a feasible approach, and I can't agree with implementing and increasing the
food
 tax because it conceives an extra burden on
people
's pockets and is challenging for the ruling
party
 to sustain their popularity. Post covid the world economy is declining and keep on declining;
as a result
,
people
 are working hard to breast up and cope with their living expenses by working hard and may doing two jobs. In
such
 an exhausting situation, giving the extra burden in implementing a levy on
food
, which is a basic need of life, is inappropriate. When a person is working hard and at the end of the day hard to buy
food
 with extra taxes are unjustified and kind of curbing the fundamental right of living.
Furthermore
, implementing extra taxes on
food
 is a policy that directly impacts the population's quality of living and will eventually reduce the ruling Government's political
party
's popularity.
Therefore
, the following term election will negatively impact the ruling
party
's vote bank and have higher chances of losing the election and sitting in the opposition rather than in the Government. In conclusion, I reckon that implementing an extra levy on
food
 is not feasible to reduce unhealthy
food
 consumption and improve population health. Indeed, It negatively impacts the
people
's quality of life and popularity of a nation;'s ruling
party
.
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