There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes being committed each year. While some think that the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both views.

There is a massive / significant increase in the number of serious
crimes
these days.
Although
some people believe that
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penalty
is the most effective way to deter horrendous
crimes
, others argue that other measures will be required. In my opinion,
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is a deterrent only when it is certain. In countries like India where capital punishment is awarded only in the rarest of
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rare cases,
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penalty
has not been particularly effective at preventing heinous
crimes
.
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penalty
does not always deter criminals.
For example
, in India
death
penalty
is awarded only in extreme cases. When someone commits a murder, they do not expect to get
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death
sentence. In the vast majority of cases, they do not get it either.
Hence
, there is no real decrease in the number of
crimes
.
This
is not the situation in countries like Saudi Arabia where you can get sure
death
even for minor offences. For
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to be effective, it must be certain. When people know beforehand that they will get
death
for committing certain
crimes
, they will think twice or thrice before executing the criminal act. In
such
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death
penalty
is certainly effective at curbing crime.
However
, there are several humanitarian and moral concerns regarding capital punishment. For one thing, it is immoral. No one, not even the government, has the right to take another
life
. Other forms of punishment like prolonged imprisonment, in my opinion, are more effective at preventing serious
crimes
. No one wants to live in captivity. If the law has provisions to keep a murderer, terrorist or rapist behind bars for
life
, we will definitely witness a drop in the number of serious
crimes
being committed. In many countries now
life
imprisonment lasts only 7 or 10 years and
then
convicts can walk free.
This
has to change. Those who commit serious offences like
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murder should be confined to
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prison for the rest of their
life
.
This
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society safer but
also
discourage serious
crimes
to a great extent. In conclusion,
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will be effective at reducing
crimes
if everyone who commits a serious offence gets it. Unfortunately,
this
is barbaric. In my opinion, it is better to keep serious offenders in prison for considerably long periods than
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them.
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  • deterrent
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation
  • ethical considerations
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • community policing
  • public opinion
  • recidivism rates
  • community-driven initiatives
  • modern policing methods
  • death penalty
  • serious crimes
  • crime rates
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