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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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It is quite popular that many people are encouraged to
work
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 and travel for a
year
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 after high school. In my opinion, it is a good idea that spending
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 for a
year
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 doing those is more advantages than starting immediately university studies.
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 gap
year
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. there are many advantages of
work
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 and study in a gap
year
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.
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, It is a leisure
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 after high school. One will take
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 with their favourite hobbies or for just relaxing.
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,it is a self-learning
year
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 to find one's own favourite field before starting to
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 a specific study program in universities.
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, someone who
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 nature should take
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year
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 to
work
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 and travel about
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, which is in order to consider
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 field is suitable for them.
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, one will get more experiences in a different culture and living. It is
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 supporting to be adaptive in
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 career.
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, there are a few
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drawbacks
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,
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need
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 a lot of money to spend for a
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,
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 of using the amount to
apply
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 a bachelor program in the
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year
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. Another reason is
adaptaion
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adaptation
 in
varios
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various
 countries because it may not comfortable like home. To conclude, spending a
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time
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 to
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 and travel is
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 a great thought for many individuals across the world, comparing to suddenly applying undergraduate study after high school. Those programs are essentially beneficial including leisure
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, seeking your preference and more profession in many conditions.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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