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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuel should be the most important global priority today. TO what extend do you agree or disagree?

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuel #priority
Let's introduction with fossil fuel, In
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a nut
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nut shell
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nutshell
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, The liquid materials which are being used to run the vehicles
that
is
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are
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 petrol, diesel and coals are examples.
Theses
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These
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 materials come under
petrolium
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petroleum
 products. When
petrolium
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petroleum
 products burn, they discharge harmful
gases
 and these
gases
 do
adverse
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effect
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effects
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 on the
envirnoment
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environment
 and human health. I do fully agree that the
subsititue
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substitute
 of fossil fuel should be
urgent
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an urgent
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 priority in
current
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the current
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 era.
Modren
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Modern
vehicles's
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vehicles'
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 engines
designed
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are designed
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 based on the use of
petrolium
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petroleum
 products. When these
fuels
burns
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burn
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, they emit dangerous
gases
 like
sulpher
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sulphur
 dioxide, carbon mono oxide and other
gases
 which are not fit for human health and
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environment
envirnoment
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. With the accumulation of
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these
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theses
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these
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gases
specially
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 carbon dioxide,
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temperature
temerature
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the temerature
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 of
earth
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the earth
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 is increasing. New research
forcasted
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forecasted
forecasts
 that by 2150, the average temperature of
earth
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the earth
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 will be raised
upto
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up to
 2
degree
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degrees
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 centigrade.
This
 means lots of plant and animal
spieces
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species
 would be in
endabger
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danger
endanger
 and fear of extinct forever.
Survial
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Survival
 of mankind would be difficult. Another hand, Fossil
fuels
 are depleting fastly from beneath. No doubt, They would be finished future. Now question is, what would be
mode
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the mode
a mode
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 of
transpotation
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transportation
 after
exhaust
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exhausting
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 these minerals?
Hence
 scientists
need
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 find the
alernative
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alternative
of
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to
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 fossil
fuels
. Solar energy is one of the
alernative
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alternative
 which is becoming popular but
still
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this
 technology would
would
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take time to replace the traditional
fuels
 because
if
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of
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 its limitation and slow effectiveness. In the
last
, I shall
advicate
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advocate
 that current fossil
fules
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fuels
files
 should be replaced by effective alternative as soon as possible. These
fuels
 are
slow
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the slow
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killer
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killers
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 of
human
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humans
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, animals and vegetation and
other mean
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 of mother earth.
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