You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses
Dear Sir, I am writing to make a reservation at your hotel over the course of the weekend.We are travelling as a family of four, Myself, my wife and my two children will be coming on
this
trip.
We would be arriving by noon on Friday since the website says that check-in starts at 12pm every day. We would check out of the hotel by 10am on Sunday.
I would love to have two in-suite rooms opposite or adjacent to each other, preferably close to the elevator. I would also
like for at least one of the rooms to have a view of the sea from its balcony
In addition
, what will be the price for such
accommodation? Also
what places of interest are around the resort area? Moreover
, I will specifically want to know if there is any play area for kids. Will the hotel have any family-friendly night activities during the period of our stay?
I am looking forward to your favourable response.
Yours faithfully
John JamesSubmitted by duzzykel on
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coherence cohesion
Your letter follows a generally logical structure, but clearer paragraphing with distinct themes in each paragraph would enhance the readability and organization.
coherence cohesion
A suitable greeting and closing are used, but consider using 'Dear Sir or Madam,' when you do not know the name of the person you are writing to, for a more appropriate formal tone.
coherence cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on a single idea, while your paragraphs tend to center around a main idea, the clarity can be improved by being more concise and avoiding additional questions within the same paragraph.
task achievement
The response completes the task, covering all bullet points, however, providing more detail and elaboration on each point could enhance the response.
task achievement
The writing tone is appropriate for the context of the letter; it is formal and polite, which is suitable for the task. You have successfully conveyed respect and anticipation for the hotel's reply.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite