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Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.

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With regard to
positive
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a positive
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 attitude, a good
future
 leader should be a positive and hopeful mindset. I still remembered the moment that I planned to achieve
second
-class
honors
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honours
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 in the
last
 semester of undergraduate study. The plan indicated that I had to get only A with 3 courses and B+ of the
rests
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rest
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 3 courses.
Then
, I took my time to pay attention consistently throughout the study period. With my hopeful determination, I did it eventually
with
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 being proud of myself.
This
 taught me about daring to think and decide with taking my full effort.
Additionally
, the point that recognizes what
strength
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strengths
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 and
weakness
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weaknesses
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 I have is an essential start to be a better
future
 leader. For me, I accepted that I used to overlook and fail to take care of some matters. After that, I will take full responsibility
of
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 those and increase my
further
 development.
Moreover
, I need to be a good student doing like an empty glass which is ready to absorb all of
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 which will considerably accelerate my progress in the
future
. In conclusion, To be a good
future
 leader should start following with a number of fundamental principles including enthusiastic learning, critical thinking and determination with
reasonable
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 plan, starting to do something with hopeful and positive mindsets, and accepting my current status including both strengths and weaknesses and intend to increase
further
 development. I believe that no one is innately outstanding, but I can substantially improve with strong aspiration.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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