The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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represent
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the development in
world
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population
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by parts under a spam time of 100 years
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, can see that the Asian
region
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and Europe
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saw a decrease
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the other parts of the
world
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are almost increasing. In 1910, the
asian
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region
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hold the majority of
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world
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population
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at a figure of 60% but it saw a decrease in 2010
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the
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percentage of 54%.
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in number on
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population
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asia
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Asia
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is expanding rapidly.
On the other hand
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, Europe
also
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saw a drop in the percentage from 1910 to 2010 at 25% and 14% respectively
as well as
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it is
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expanding in
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the rate
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of its
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. In comparison to the other regions of the
world
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which are North
America
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, Africa,
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America
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and
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stood at the range of 5%, 4%,3% and 3% in 1910
whereas
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by 2010 many regions grew up which are Africa and
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America
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at 10% and 8%
respectionely
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respectively
at the same time some
region
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have the same percentage as they have in 1910 are North
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america
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and others.
Athrough
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Although
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we can see the addition of one
region
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by 2010 which is
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east and north
africa
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at 6% and the total
number of
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world
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population
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from 1910-2010
is
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raised
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much
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1700 million to 6 Billion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, region, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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