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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Environmental
issues
 are escalating globally. Some people believe that the loss of
plants
 and
animals
 is the main cause of the troubles we are facing in the
environment
.
However
, others pointing towards global warming, climate change and mismanagement of plastic wastes are
an
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essential problems for the human race. I strongly believe that global warming is the main cause of all
issues
 related to the
environment
 and the following paragraphs describe the causes of environmental
issues
 and the methods to alleviate them.
Firstly
, deforestation by humans is the significant cause for the end of some special species of
plants
 and
animals
 from our
nature
. It will adversely affect the ecology and
finally
 results
in
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 the end of the human race, because the life cycle of our
nature
 is dependent on all creatures on
this
 planet.
For instance
, lack of
plants
 leads to the absence of oxygen in
nature
.
Secondly
, rising pollution in seawater affects aquatic life which leads to the absence of some fishes and marine species essential for human growth. Accepting the aforementioned statements regarding
plants
 and
animals
 there are other problems related to
nature
. The significant one is global warming.
Although
 human consumption of fossil fuels is increasing, it is not better for ecological life.
Furthermore
, climate change and mismanagement of plastic wastes are
also
 showing upcoming disasters for the
environment
 and living organisms. Overall, the absence of
plants
 and
animals
 adversely affect our ecology, at the same time the rising
issues
 like global warming and climate change have to be reduced by implementing strict laws for protecting
nature
. I strongly suggest that the International leaders of all countries have to discuss these
issues
 and controlling pollution would be a solution for protecting the
environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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