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University should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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University
 has opined the door for both females and males to be part of their community . I disagree with
this
 statement that says:''
University
 should accept
one
 male for
one
 female in every subject.'' I believe that because
that is
 not fair for the
student
 and universities should not be concerned with the
gender
 on their applications.
One
 reason I believe that
university
 should not accept their
students
 by
gender
 is that
students
 should be accepted due to their hard work ,not because of their
gender
 ,
therefore
 ,
that is
 not going to be fair for them. While some
students
 work really hard to get high
grades
 , some of them do not really care.
For example
, If the
student
 can guarantee his acceptance to the
university
 ;unfortunately, he will just stop trying.
Moreover
, it will create a sense of injustice among the
students
. Another reason I believe the
university
 should not accept their
students
 by
gender
 is that universities should have an objective perspective . It is very important to look at the
students
' applications equally, and let the
students
 be remarkable by their own
grades
 , activities and their personalities.
For instance
, the
university
 has to roll out
one
student
 , and I think that
student
 should be the
student
 who does not have good
grades
. Of course, in
this
 ,way it will be equal and fair. As
this
 essay has demonstrated, acceptance in the
university
 should not be
gender
 .
University
 should concern about certain things like
grades
 and how serious
this
student
 is.And it should give the opportunity equally .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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