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Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since time immemorial,
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 have been disappeared from
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 world for several reasons, but humans are not facing so many problems because of
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 phenomenon in that all
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 are not beneficial for mankind.
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, there has been a growing body of opinion that initiatives should be taken only to protect
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 that are useful for humans. Being a rational mind, I, too, assent to
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 notion, for I am of the view that saving some wild
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 are costly and harmful. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of preserving only crucial
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 as a way of saving money.
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, if a country’s government had to spend money on all wildlife’s preservation, the total expense would be exorbitant, causing a shortage of funds for more pressing social issues,
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 as education, security, health, and suchlike.
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, a nation should take the necessary steps only to protect important
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, namely, dogs, cows, goats, to name but a few. To cite an example, an empirical study conducted by Oxford University reveals that only 20% of
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 are necessary for humankind; so a state can easily cut its costs for the protection of all
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 and invest the surplus amount in the development works. Another critical rationale in reference to why all wild
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 should not be protected is necessarily synonymous with deterring people from dangers.
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 to say, most of the
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 staying in a jungle are ferocious and harmful for humans. So, if a country takes initiatives in order to protect all
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, it is one of the ways to lead the general public to death. To exemplify, in South Africa, it is not allowed to shoot or kill any
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 much as they enter into the residential area, resulting in losing hundreds of lives every year.
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, with a view to protecting people from dangerous
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, governments ought not to focus on wildlife. In conclusion, inasmuch as preserving facilities are costly and some
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 are dangerous for humankind, people should only think about how to protect useful
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 so that they can meet their needs.

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