Currently children have less responsibilities than they had in the past some say this is a good change some argue that it had negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion based on your personal experience.

In
this
modern time due to the development of ,
technology
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there are fewer responsibilities that concern juveniles.
Although
this
can have some negative effects on kids, it seems that it can be positively influential for the
children
and society. The easy
life
of modern times had made
children
be expected with fewer responsibilities. Because of the new technology and ,urbanism
the
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routine
tasks
are less demanding to be done by human hands.
For example
in the past people needed to provide water from different parts of the city like a river or a well.
This
was a tiring task that was mostly given to younger members of the family but nowadays these sort of
tasks
are being provided by the cities infrastructures and had taken the burden of the
responsibility
from the
children
.
However
, these
tasks
were mostly boring and tiring and sometimes dangerous it helped the
children
to have a sense of duty and it could be vital for their future and to gain a sense of
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independency
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.
Although
the
tasks
and different roles had made the
children
be more self-liable and independent
this
life
skill can be learned from other activities as well. Whit the burden of the routine
responsibility
being omitted from the
children
mind they can be more creative and learn new
life
skills aside from the ones that they could learn through the
tasks
they used to have. There are so many
life
skills that my younger sister with different games and
tasks
that she had in school that was not necessary her
responsibility
but a part of a game and her choice and you could see that with more time that she had because of the fewer
tasks
that she had to do she would be able to try different and innovative methods and be more creative with the
tasks
that she was given. In conclusion, it seems that
although
the responsibilities had some beneficial aspects for the
children
, these aspects can be learned with other methods and the fact that
children
have less
responsibility
can help them to be more creative and help them gain more skills.
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